Here is the description for Part I:
The destruction of the vampires marked the ending of an age.
As the vampire miasma faded, Dimilioc led the way toward an alliance of black dogs and ordinary humans against monsters deadlier than either.
Yet not all monsters are easy to recognize. Practitioners of black magic hide in plain sight, spinning webs of confusion and madness, determined that the age now dawning will be theirs.
Dimilioc isn’t going to let that happen. But black dog strength, Pure magic, and human intelligence may not be enough to stand against enemies far more subtle and terrifying than any Dimilioc has faced before …
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Now I need to finalize description for Part II. Here’s what I’ve got so far, and thank you to those who commented on the first version.
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Grayson Lanning, Master of Dimilioc, intends to defeat and destroy every practitioner of black magic in North America. His first target: Gossamer, the black witch who has made herself an enemy of Dimilioc and of the ordinary human world.
To this battle, Grayson brings the formidable strength of his black dogs, every shield Pure magic can provide, the ingenuity of his human allies, and his own unwavering resolve.
But as the storm winds rise, every plan begins to unravel …
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I think this is decent. One of my concerns with this is that it does make it sound like Grayson becomes an important pov character in this part of the story. He doesn’t. He is, however, central in the sense of pulling everything together. Also, maybe that’s just me and readers won’t generally have that expectation.
One problem is: It’s not easy to get three or five pov characters into the description. As you see, I just avoided mentioning any pov characters for Part I. As part of that avoidance, I put “Dimilioc” rather than “Grayson” into that description when I said “Dimilioc isn’t going to let that happen.”
I could do that again here, but it sounds weird to me to revise the description for Part II with a personified “Dimilioc” rather than Grayson. But maybe THAT is just me and it would sound fine to say “Dimilioc intends to …” and “Their first target …”
What do you think?
With Part III, I did mention three different pov characters, just very briefly:
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When the storm breaks, nothing is safe.
Natividad’s plan: protect everyone she loves, no matter the cost. Miguel’s plan: hold together the alliance between black dogs and humans, whatever it takes. Alejandro’s plan: follow orders without fail, lest all Dimilioc’s most dangerous enemies escape.
But Gossamer’s webs, already spun and waiting, lie before them all …
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So obviously with that one, I didn’t go with a sort of personified “Dimilioc,” at least not in this version.
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What if you took a non-personified approach?
“The black dogs of Dimilioc intend to defeat and destroy every practitioner of black magic in North America. Their first target: Gossamer, the black witch who has made herself an enemy to both the ordinary and extraordinary worlds.
To this battle, they bring their own formidable strength, every shield Pure magic can provide, the ingenuity of their human allies, and unwavering resolve.
But as the storm winds rise, every plan begins to unravel …”
Thanks, Amara, I think maybe I like that better! I think I’ll fiddle with your version and use something similar to that.
I like this one too!
I like Amara’s version of the Part II back cover text better – to me, the original does sound like Grayson should be the main POV character.
Even with Amara’s edits, I still don’t think it quite aligns with what happens in the book though – it doesn’t even really hint at Ethan’s first goal, or everything Natividad & Grayson & everybody are doing. Obviously this is hard to discuss without getting into spoilers, but would it be possible to say something about needing to wrap up other tasks first, or mention Keziah’s family in a vague way? I think the last sentence is trying to do that (& I do like that sentence as a sentence), but I think if I only read this blurb, I would end up with some very wrong expectations for how much Gossamer is in the book.
The summary for Part III looks good to me, given what I know.