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Beginnings: PURE MAGIC

While we’re on the topic of novel beginnings, here are the first few pages of PURE MAGIC, in which a brand-new protagonist is introduced.

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Justin had not been looking for a church. Sanctuary . . . that, maybe.

Not, God knew, from enemies. He had no enemies. Was it logical to want sanctuary from your friends? I heard what happened, Justin, I’m so sorry. How are you doing? Do you want to talk about it? He did not want to talk about it. Nothing would get better just because he talked about it.

Worst of all were the ones who tried to say something unique and creative, because whatever they said, it came out stupid or offensive. At least you’re not too young, you’ll get over this, you’ll be fine.

Justin had wanted to shout, “Don’t tell me I’ll be fine!” He’d wanted to put that on a tee shirt, violent blood-red letters on a black shirt – maybe that would have gotten the idea through a few dense skulls. He wanted a tee shirt that said You can’t help, so just shut the hell up. That would shock everyone who thought he was so even-tempered, such a nice guy.

But he wanted everyone to know what had happened. He wanted the world to stop. The clear sunlit beauty of the desert spring was an offense. He wanted to tear the blossoms off all the flowers.

He couldn’t stay. Everyone had thought that after the funeral, he would go back to Roswell with his grandmother. But he couldn’t. He couldn’t bear her grief layered on top of his own. He’d left a note and his cellphone in the middle of his mother’s desk, in her study, on top of a stack of ungraded tests that he supposed now some TA would have to grade, and cleared out the account that was supposed to be for college, and walked out.

And now he was here. Not anywhere in particular, because he had no idea where he was going. Just here, wherever here was: one nondescript town in a chain of nondescript towns, linked like gritty beads on the necklace of the train tracks. The train conductor had announced the town’s name, but Justin couldn’t remember it now. He didn’t care. He hadn’t cared, when he’d walked out, where he was going. Just away, out, gone. Out of the desert, north and east into a cold country where the gray weather knew how to echo loss. To this grimy street in this nameless industrial town with a cheap bar on one side of the street and a ridiculously gothic church on the other. Was it possible to want sanctuary from yourself?

Stopping, his hands jammed in his pockets and the collar of his jacket turned up against the chill, Justin looked up the church’s wide, curving stairway. It led, in a smooth arc containing fourteen rises and thirteen runs, with a total rotation of . . . just over a hundred and four degrees, up to a pair of great carved doors standing between panels of stained glass.

Justin had meant to go into the bar, get a burger or wings or something. A beer. They probably didn’t card, in a place like that. A beer would be good.

But now there was this church. Somehow, despite its grimy surroundings, despite the smells of hot oil and stale beer emanating from the bar, the church contrived to look solid and honest and perfectly at home. A sudden sharp longing for the hot wind of the desert, for the homey scents of hot concrete and acrid mesquite, closed Justin’s throat. His mother had always insisted he attend mass with her . . . he hadn’t minded.

So, yeah, maybe he was looking for sanctuary. Following a half-felt impulse, he put his foot on the first step.

Then someone opened the door from within, came out, closed the door behind him, and turned, with a jingle of keys, to lock it. Then he turned again, caught Justin’s eye, and paused.

Justin, obscurely embarrassed, took his foot quickly off the step and pretended he had not meant to go up the stairs to those doors.

“Sorry!” said the man. He was a big man, comfortably heavy without actually being fat, with a round good-natured face and an easy smile. He was wearing ordinary clothes: a tan jacket and jeans. Justin wouldn’t have realized he was actually a priest except for the white collar showing at his throat.

The priest said, “I lock up at six unless there’s a late service. I don’t like to, but I also don’t like to find drunks in the sacristy when I come in in the morning! But I can leave it till later just this once, if you’d like to come in.”

“No,” Justin said hurriedly. “No, never mind. I mean, thanks anyway, but it doesn’t matter.”

“It’s no bother,” said the priest, and, looking at him closely, added, “Or come back to the rectory, if you like. I’m not much as a cook, but I was just going to heat up some baked beans, make toast, fry some ham. And there’s a cake. I didn’t make it, don’t worry about that!”

Justin felt his face heat. “You rescue runaways? That your thing? Because I’m not –”

“I know!” the priest said quickly. “You don’t look like you’re down to your last dollar, son, but, see, you do look like you might do with an hour of friendly company over buttered toast and baked beans. You’d be doing me a favor, believe me! I hate eating alone. I was going to walk down to the art show they’ve got set up down by the river, but to tell you the truth, the blues they’ll be playing, not my favorite. Do join me. I’ll do the talking if you don’t want to. You’ve probably noticed I don’t mind the sound of my own voice. Good thing for a man in my line of work, don’t you think? There’s plenty of ham. Spiral cut,” the priest added in a coaxing tone. “Honey baked. And the cake’s coconut.”

Friendly company for an hour sounded unexpectedly good. The company of a priest who liked people but didn’t know anything. That sounded . . . like a not-terrible idea. And supper didn’t actually sound bad, either. He gave the priest a narrow look. He seemed like a decent guy. Probably the man just genuinely liked people. Justin could usually tell. “Coconut, huh?”

“Beautiful thick frosting,” the priest assured him. “The rectory is just around here . . .” he gestured to the right, where a narrow alley led back and around the church.

Justin took a step after him. “You invite everyone in for supper do you? Isn’t that kind of risky? Father,” he added belatedly.

The priest smiled back over his shoulder. “Mark. Father Mark. Yes, well, a nice young man like you, why not? Life’s too short to worry about every little thing, don’t you think? So tell me, are you on your way to someplace, or away from someplace? Don’t answer that if you don’t want to. Right, here we are.” He shoved open an unlocked door in a small brick-fronted house, indistinguishable from all the other buildings along this street except for the small stained glass panel set in the door and, beneath a shuttered window, an ugly concrete window box, empty of flowers in this chilly country where winter lingered into what ought by rights to have been spring.

The door opened right into the rectory kitchen. The smell of baking ham rolled out to meet Justin before he even set foot on the steps, overcoming his last reluctance, and he followed Father Mark up onto the narrow porch and into the house.

The kitchen was cramped, but bright and scrupulously clean and filled with good smells. The promised cake, one thin slice already missing, was four layers tall and frosted with great swoops of coconut icing. It stood on a platter in the middle of a butcher block counter that divided the kitchen from the small . . . not really a dining room, Justin decided. The little odd-shaped nook was neither formal enough nor large enough to deserve the name. But there was room for three or four people to sit around the little table, if they were friendly. A barred window above the table looked out into the alley. Justin wondered who would put a window where it would look out into nothing but an alley, but maybe there was no better view anywhere in this city apartment. And the window did let in the light. The last rays of the setting sun turned the dingy brick of the opposite building a warmer shade of red and almost made the alley attractive, in a cramped sort of way.

“Silverware’s in that drawer, napkins over there, plates up there. You want coffee?” asked Father Mark. “Tea, milk – whole milk, two percent’s terrible stuff. Tastes like water.”

“Does it?” Justin’s mother had always bought two percent. Justin took silverware out of the drawer, mildly surprised to find it was real silver. His mother had said silver was her one totally unnecessary luxury. She’d said everyone was entitled to one totally unnecessary luxury . . . he was struck with a sudden vivid memory of sitting with his mother at their huge dining room table with a can of polish and all the silver spread out between them. He had complained about having to polish it. He’d said it wasn’t his totally unnecessary luxury. His mother had said he didn’t have a luxury yet, so he might as well enjoy part ownership in hers.

He asked quickly, to block the memory, “If two percent tastes like water, what does skim milk taste like?”

Diluted water,” the priest said promptly. “Here, let me just grab the can opener. You like canned beans, I hope. I love ’em. They’re sweet, sure, but baked beans are supposed to be sweet. Wish I had some nice crisp bacon to add to ’em, but who can think ahead that far? Good thing they’re tasty like this.”

Justin’s mother had always cooked beans from scratch. She’d made New England baked beans sometimes, but never too sweet. He couldn’t remember whether she’d added bacon to her beans. It seemed wrong that he couldn’t remember. He said, “Sure.”

Father Mark gave him a swift, assessing look, but said only, “Want to slice the bread? It’s good. Whole wheat this week. One of my parishioners bakes it for me. Wonderful woman. Bakes bread every Sunday, brings me three loaves before mass. Bakes for the bereaved, too.” He paused.

Justin looked at him.

“Bereavement does leave its mark on a person, I find,” the priest said gently. “It’s different for everyone, of course, but somehow there’s a look to it. You learn to spot it. Your father, was it? Mother? Girlfriend? Don’t answer if you don’t want to.” He turned away, busying himself with the ham rather than looking at Justin.

Justin didn’t intend to answer, but something about the Father Mark’s calm neutrality made it possible for him to say, “My mother. I never – I never knew my father. But my mother –” he stopped, and then couldn’t go on.

“Hmm. Supper first, do you good to get yourself on the outside of some of this ham. You can tell me about it – or not, up to you – after cake and coffee. Toaster’s right over there, butter in the fridge. My mother, now, she passed away nine, ten years ago. Cancer, poor woman. We all knew her time was limited, but even when you know it’s coming, it’s somehow still a shock. And then when the struggle’s over for the dying, it’s just starting for the bereaved, isn’t it? You think you’re going to get used to it, you know, but you don’t, exactly. But –”

Justin had been listening, half hypnotized, to this easy flow of talk. He hadn’t even begun to decide whether he found Father Mark’s words offensive or comforting, or to decide whether he might actually stay in this warm, plain, cramped kitchen that was nothing at all like his mother’s kitchen, let this priest talk to him, maybe even answer. The first batch of toast popped out of the toaster and Father Mark was just saying something about butter . . . and something hit the door, shattering the little pane of stained glass and shaking the whole door in its frame. Justin turned, butter knife in one hand. Father Mark turned, too, holding the little pan of baked beans he had just been putting on the stove, his round face blank and startled.

Then another blow broke open the door and flung the shattered remnants of wood and glass into the kitchen, and a monster shouldered its way through the doorway.

In that first instant, Justin thought it was a bear. It was huge like a bear, with a massive head. It had a shaggy pelt and heavy shoulders and powerful limbs, and when it reared upright, it lifted paws armed with long black claws that might have been a bear’s. But it wasn’t a bear. The fluid way it moved made it look almost like a big cat, a lion or something, but it sure wasn’t a cat. It looked a little like a dog, a mastiff maybe, but too big and not right. Its glowing orange eyes weren’t like the eyes of any natural animal, and its fangs, showing as it snarled, were black as obsidian. It wasn’t anything Justin had ever seen, or even imagined. He threw the toast at it, and then, more sensibly, the toaster, which slammed into its face and made it flinch and roar. But the roar wasn’t any sound an animal might have made: it was almost like a laugh and almost like a curse, and it held intelligence as well as fury and hatred.

* * *

There you go: Justin, a new protagonist for this book! What do you think of him so far?

I love Father Mark; he was supposed to be fairly important, but in fact I couldn’t find anything crucial for him to do and the book was showing signs of stretching out, so he is not going to appear except in this early scene. Sorry.

This chapter started as chapter 1, moved down to become chapter 2, then moved up again to take the chapter 1 spot after all. Ah, deciding about the structure of your book! I had a hard time deciding whether I had to start with a familiar character or whether it would be okay to start with a new one. Caitlin thought it was better to start with Justin, and I do really love this opening scene.

Incidentally, I also just saw the first version of the PURE MAGIC cover, which features Justin and Natividad and which I like a lot.

You may be asking yourselves now: are we looking at a new love triangle? Justin vs Ezekiel, Natividad torn between them, unable to make up her mind?

Can’t answer that, I’m afraid. You will just have to wait and see. Thinking about my other books, do you have a guess?

a) Yes, definitely a love triangle, it’s obvious from this introduction to your new character.

b) No, definitely no love triangle, that would never happen in a Neumeier story,.

c) Can’t tell.

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14 Comments Beginnings: PURE MAGIC

  1. Mary+Beth

    I really love Father Mark — so comforting and non-demanding, so exactly what Justin seems to need! At this point, I’d hope he’d have a peripheral role in the plot, maybe a source of comfort or guidance for Justin to consult later on, but just from this excerpt I don’t anticipate him being a major character. (I was a little sad to read at the end that he won’t appear later — I sure hope it’s not because he’s murdered by a black dog!)

    Justin seems intriguing. His mother is actually a more fully realized character to me right now, because of all the things we learn about her in Justin’s memories–she was a college professor, she loved frivolous indulgences like real silver, she was religious, she balanced health and flavor in her milk-buying, she was a good mother and deeply loved by her son. All I know about Justin is that he’s grieving, he’s probably between 16 and 18, and he’s not a Black Dog. (Is he one of the elusive male Pure? That would be AWESOME). But I’m really looking forward to knowing more.

    I could see there being a love triangle (it’s practically a requirement for YA), but I don’t think it would be overwrought. And I would actually really like to see Natividad presented with an effective choice, because the narrowing of her options in BLACK DOG bothered me a lot. On the other hand, Justin probably isn’t in the best place for a romance right now, and love triangles don’t seem to be precisely your thing…

    Really looking forward to this book. :)

  2. Elaine T

    I like Father Mark, but I can see how he probably won’t have anything major to do. I like Justin, too. He comes across as real.

    Don’t see a real love triangle coming up,l but I could see various characters THINKING there’s a love triangle.

    If he’s an unknowing male PURE Natividad and.. the older Pure, Thaddeus’ wife, would be working with him to teach him. And I remember you’ve got a couple youngish female black dogs. If you’re going to pair him off, I wouldn’t be surprised if he wound up with one of them.

    If that’s the same town from BLACK DOG, that church either got rebuilt awfully fast or more time has passed than I expected.

  3. Chachic

    Ahhh, can’t wait to read the whole sequel! Father Mark and Justin both seem like good characters. I can empathize with Justin and his loss. I don’t think there will be a love triangle but knowing how Ezekiel is, he might get jealous of someone who gets close to Natividad.

  4. Maureen E

    I couldn’t read this yesterday because I’d just read something else and was all emotional about it (oh, the life of a reader). Having finally read it now, it’s really lovely. And I really get Justin, especially this bit: “Was it logical to want sanctuary from your friends? I heard what happened, Justin, I’m so sorry. How are you doing? Do you want to talk about it? He did not want to talk about it. Nothing would get better just because he talked about it.”

    I would guess b, when it comes to love triangles, but there’s a first time for everything, I suppose.

    And I love Father Mark.

  5. Rachel

    If and when I write a third book, maybe I can find a way to bring Father Mark back. Because I really like him, too! It pained me to write him out of PURE MAGIC after this one chapter.

  6. Rachel D

    I must have this book now!! I read Black Dog three times in one week. I loved it!!!

  7. Rachel

    Rachel D., it’s comments like that which make me want to go home and immediately start working on Book 3. Thanks!

  8. Rachel

    Really, Pete? What are you thinking of? To me it looks like Mienthe and Tan straight through.

  9. Pete+Mack

    Whoops! My bad. I meant Land of the Burning Sands. Bertaud was obviously smitten with Tehre, but he never had a chance.

  10. Rachel

    Ah! Yes, and if Gereint hadn’t been there, Tehre might have reciprocated. Poor Bertaud, I did want him to meet the right person before the trilogy ended, but it never worked out.

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